While employed, Gene worked at an
office supply distributor. Much of his day involved going over order
forms and maintaining spread sheets. His life was ruled by the spread
sheets. He didn't mind much though. Gene took pride in his work. He
enjoyed optimizing the organization of data and finding better ways
to look at it. He came up for a snappy title for his position,
Distribution Manager, and took pride in handing out business cards.
It wasn't something to pick up chicks with, but he liked it.
Due to the various mundane tasks he
would tackle on a day to day basis, Gene took to unbending paper
clips while he worked. It seemed to help him concentrate and no one
really seemed to mind the broken paper clip parts strewn across his
desk.
While he was in a meeting during his
first few months at the company, Gene had found four tiny magnetic
spheres stuck to the chair he was sitting in. They served as a nice
substitute for the paper clips during the meeting, which was of no
interest to him. He separated them and let them pull themselves back
together. He like the idea of a force that brought four separate things into one.
Getting back to his desk, Gene was
looking forward to jumping into a new document that measured client's
orders per month against their proximity to new product distribution
centers the company had just opened. He put the magnets down on his
desk and reached for a paper clip. Before he could get to unbending
the paper clip, he noticed something.
The magnets had brought the scraps on
his desk together. What was once a line of magnets and a bunch of
broken paper clips was now a little metal tree. The broken pieces of
paper clip extended from the magnetic trunk like branches.
Gene played around with this, trying
to allow it to take shape itself like it had before. He saw
something in the mess and tried to fill in the blanks. He took a few
more paperclip scraps and a screw that had fallen out of his chair,
adding them into the mix. He was careful not to further alter the
pieces themselves. If something was bent one way, he didn't change it
to better suit his needs, he just let the existing pieces come
together as they were.
Eventually, the magnetic spheres took
the shape of a back and spine, the screw sat on top, like a head. The
magnets held the arms and legs to the rest of the body too. It was a
little person. He looked up at Gene and seemed to wave. The magnetic nervous system allowed the man to move and be posed. Gene smiled and
sat the man down next to his coffee mug.
People didn't usually notice the magnet
man, or if they did, they didn't mention it. He sat on the desk for
six years. Gene would occasionally move the little man around the
desk, changing his pose, but other than that, Gene didn't think too
much about him either. He quickly became just as innocuous as any of
the other trinkets people collected on their desks.
When then time came for him to leave
the company, Gene went quietly. He never liked to burn bridges and he
felt that the experience had been valuable, so he turned in his ID
badge and cleared off his desk. He wasn't happy about giving six years
to a company only to be told “It was a really hard decision” and
“There just isn't room in the budget.” But he was happy for the
experience and tried to take it in stride. Cleaning off his desk, he
realized that almost everything belonged to the company, the only
things that were his were his coffee mug and his name plate. He
packed these up in the box his boss had given him, and almost missed
the little magnet man. Gene threw him in too.
The box had been bouncing around quite
a bit while Gene took it home, down stairs, up stairs, taking turns
on his way back to his apartment that he wasn't sure he could afford
anymore. He could here the nameplate as it bounced against the coffee
mug making desperately trying to make a toast.
So here Gene stood, looking down at
these metal scraps. He lays them out on the counter next to the box,
trying to piece the little man back together. The first time he did
it, Gene wasn't quite sure how everything would take shape. He has an
image in his mind now. That little man that had been sitting quietly
on Gene's desk for six years. He tries to build the pieces back up,
but the image of the little man sitting on his desk keeps coming
back. He know what he wants this mess to be, and that makes it so
much more difficult. The pieces just don't fit any more.
Tell me more about the paper clips. is it a habit or a quirk...try doing a conceptual analysis of the 2 concepts that you are using in Gene's story
ReplyDeletelook up the meanings of each of these words (habit and quirk) and see what the attributes or characteristics of each one are...use an accredited dictionary. Then go to Google Scholar-use the search terms
Concept analysis: Habit Concept analysis: Quirk
see what you come up with.
Rationale: the more clearly you understand each, the stronger and more significant your use of the word has in your story.
Thanks! I will do just that. Stay tuned for 3rd draft.
DeleteThat was some great advice. I reworked Gene's dynamic with the paper clips a bit in this draft. Let me know what you think! I feel like it serves as a better symbol for Gene and how he identifies himself now. Thanks again, you made this better : )
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